/lit/ - Literature and Writing

If any of you have critique for my stories (Hunters in Meadowridge, Climax in Edmonton) please dont hesitate, I realized my mistake after publishing that there is no introduction to the plot, I thought I could swing it in media res but alas it turned out not as intended.

>>1715
I'm a bit too busy these days but when I get to immerse myself into the feuilleton I'll try to give some critique.

>>1715
>>1726
I just read Hunters in Meadowridge. I felt the initial part was too flowery, almost like a Norm joke where he's improvising some filler. But what comes later is great.
The last paragraph left me confused, though. There was a shot that hits the rock, and a scream. Peters gets up. Did the shot wake up the bear and cause it to eat Willem? And this will sound a bit meta, but does that make it a literal Willem scream? If so hats off to you, kek. I never thought I'd see someone managing to insert a Willem scream in a mute medium, it's amazing kek.

>>1880
So my thought process was to make a story based off a painting. So I found this one and started planning my story. The man in the cave is the devil "Lucy aka Lucifer" since my basic understanding of religion is that his existence is to corrupt souls so I used the cave as the entrance into hell. I tried to incorporate satanic animals as foreshadow, and I vaguely included the seven deadly sins. For the devil I used scripture but modified for a satanic purpose barring a few sentences. I had to throw in a backstory so when the other hunter shows up it makes sense. Willem Ill change his name to Wilhelm and steal your idea, it was unintentional on my part unfortunately traverses to the hell-side at the end and his body immolates and combusts, and cause there aint no room for pity in hell.

I read the story after a month or so and I could really touch up a lot. My entry for the next issue is a thanksgiving dinner with a Jew family.

>>1885
Very interesting. Honestly a lot of the symbolism had gone over my head, including the Lucy part or the hellhound part that should have been obvious (but discussing it with a friend he did notice both the Lucy part and the biblical themes before I had seen your reply). Did Lucy turn himself into the owl?